The Stickleback

A brick is placed on stickled back
That swims in brooks past muddy flats
As pressures force on broken hopes
A glass is raised whilst others choke
The smog that fills a festered air
Encircles doubts and brings despair
Through rancid lakes that stand alone
In stagnant dreams and spoiled homes
When lilies float for reasons known
You enter deep on tired bones…..
Whilst stickle back swims further on
The waters beat an endless song
That sing of warmth & crystals clear
And moonlit skies bring hunger near
And in a ditch that flows with rain
A child’s splash endures complains
And gutters rush with laden things
That float beneath the trodden rim
Yet stickle back swims further on
With life’s regrets of moments gone……
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15 Responses to “The Stickleback”

  1. moondustwriter Says:

    Life’s regrets of moments gone…

    the cry of many unfortunately

    Nicely done my friend

  2. things work out great for you?
    beautifully done poem!

  3. you write so very well,
    thanks for sharing with us.
    have fun visiting.

    http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/05/12/fickle-comfort-slips-away/
    here is mine.
    thanks.

  4. amazing…the intensity of this verse is incredible “The smog that fills a festered air
    Encircles doubts and brings despair
    Through rancid lakes that stand alone
    In stagnant dreams and spoiled homes
    When lilies float for reasons known
    You enter deep on tired bones…..” Love it!

    • hi thanks for your comments…was going to use this for the unemployed series but it covered a subject i had already discussed. still, I liked the poem so chose to release it anyway

  5. I loved the flow to this Pete. It fit so well with the fluid theme. Beautiful rhyme.

  6. yes,
    thank you for thinking of me!
    cheers!

  7. Some dark images, but with a good flow. I like the explanations that you offered to your other comments. They give more insight into the poem.

    • hi & thanks for your comments…. as said above i had it floating around but couldn’t find a way to use it in the unemployment series..but loved it so released it anyway..cheers Pete

  8. Stickleback (great name) seems determined to go with the flow—through shallow water and spoiled channel so to speak. Thanks.

    • hi mate, its one of our most common fresh water fish so was was quite easy, and you are right such an excellent name to work with. Let you in to a secret on that one, my kid wass playing with some stickle bricks!!!!! amazing where the ideas come from isnt it LOL

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